Assignment #4

• My final paper is different from my rough draft in several ways. First, it is longer. I've found that as a writer I tend to cram all my information in quickly, but then i go back and explain in more detail so that it is clearer to the reader. Secondly, it has a lot less grammatical errors. Between peer reviewing and lessons on incomplete sentences I was able to catch a lot of mistakes in my paper that are easily fixed. Lastly, my final paper is different from my rough draft because it tells a lot better story. In my opinion, it flows better and sounds less choppy. The details really help clarifying what is going on in the story for the reader, and the conclusion ties it all together. 
• I do not think I made any major revisions in my literacy narrative. All revisions are important, but when writing my rough drafts I try to put as much work into them as possible so that its less work for me later on. As i mentioned earlier, I made grammatical revisions and adding details to help my paper flow, but no big changes occurred. 
• After revising my paper I did notice a pattern somewhat. I learned that I need to work on comma splices. It has always been a problem for me because they do not stick out as much like a misspelled word would. I was lucky that we reviewed comma splices in class this week so that I can double and triple check if I slipped up. Another pattern I found is that I need to elongate my thoughts onto the paper so that I am not just spitting out all this information and it is too much to handle. 
• Several different things guided me while revising my paper. Peer review, class, and myself all helped to to guide my choices when it came time to revise. Peer review was the most helpful out of the three. Reading a paper out loud and saying it in your head are two totally different things I learned. It was really nice to get feedback from other classmates and see how their papers turned out as well. 
• I think my conclusion is the strongest part of my essay. It really ties the whole paper together and teaches a lesson to myself and hopefully the readers with struggles of writing assignments. Personally, I do not think any of my paper is weak. I worked really hard to revise and I am proud that it turned out the way it did. I'm 100% positive my paper is not perfect, but no ones writing ever is. Unless you are like the author of The Hunger Games! :)